Okay the last of a trilogy but unfortunately not the last book I have of this author. Perhaps that one will help me gauge whether or not the writing in these books is a fluke. I’m not optimistic about this.
I like to call this ‘verse 2, same as the first’ because the plot is similar in ways to Born of Fire but much looser and strained.
Will give it this- the ‘thinking’ of the characters doesn’t feel as strained and it left behind the trust them/don’t trust them one-eighty as in the previous additions. However, the body positioning issue still exists. This is something a friend mine taught me at an early age when I first started writing. Act out the scene to make sure it’s possible. What she describes in some of the scenes is only possible if her character can bend into a pretzel. The old shtick of having the characters babble on and on still is overused and I really think the author has trouble setting the scene and describing. It is rare to have an author who can do both well and usually if you do one right, the other one can be forgiven. Not so with Kenyon. The clichés ruin that affect along with the characters TMI factor.
For example, about fifty pages in the MC Devyn gives too much information about another member of his crew (Sway). For someone doing illicit activities, giving a new crewmember –that no background check has been done- isn’t showing any intelligence. Along the lines of the descriptive, the instant attraction seems forced especially considering the female MC Alix was used as a sperm portal before. She goes from lusting after him in her mind to ‘he’s going to kill me’.
Let’s speak on the female MC Alix, shall we? Once again we have a skinny character to the point a sammich is called for. It’s as if the author thinks that’s what men want in life. A woman that if they decided to really have some monkey sex they’d have to worry about breaking her in two. Again we have a character that is being forced to bring down the MC (see: verse 2, same as the first). We have another woman whose family is in trouble if she doesn’t do what the bad guy says and, again, you never get any interaction with the antagonist. Yeah, I’m not even going to call the female MC Alix the antagonist because she doesn’t even come close.
Maybe that’s the real problem in this series as a whole. The antagonist is so far in the background you don’t feel for the characters as a whole. You get their perspective on the ‘big meanie’ but except for what the characters briefly (and I mean briefly) divulge her and there.
Overall, the story chugs along with no real climax. I’ m not so much concerned with the fact that the children of the previous books are involved with the League (again, not really explained much as far as the League in general), it’s more that they don’t get themselves out of the trouble. Their parents do it for them. You could draw the conclusion that they are spoiled children but I don’t think that’s it.
Trying to be too sappy and over-the-top just makes it a downer of the book. Putting in Syn’s first kid Paden just made it worse.
5- first 100 pages
Why did I do this? Like the word ‘laugh’, it is over-used by the author. I don’t want to go on too much of a rant about it (surprised? I am!). It’s not a special unique quirk of one character, it’s spread out. Now I didn’t make note of each character who said it but the sheer influx of characters in this book, it might be about right. On the laughing… get a thesaurus or something. Writing ‘laugh’ makes me think of something grand and I don’t think that was the intent. Ever hear of words like chuckle, snort, or snicker? Nah, didn’t think so.
This book was a little more likeable but it still had too many flaws to be considered a good read.